What would be a good way to start an email to a college baseball coach where you are interested in attending?

Im beginning to look at colleges and baseball programs and would like to email the coaches about paperwork but i cant get past the intoduction or even the first sentence. IM STUCK!

What would be a good way to start an email to a college baseball coach where you are interested in attending?
How bout this:








Dear (Coach Name):





Hello, my name is (your name) thinking of attending your school. What kind of baseball programs does your school offer? (Then proceed to say some of your qualities that you could add to their team.)





Yours truly,


(your name again)





If you'd like, email me what you come up with and I'll see what I think.
Reply:Jules or Juliet has a good response. I'd try hers.
Reply:Dear Coach,


I am an avid baseball player and have played for x years. I am a long time supporter of you and the team at XXXX College. I plan to attend XXX college in the fall, and look foward to team try-outs. I would appreciate any pointers you could give me to make my tryout experience as successful as possible. If there is any applicable paperwork or forms required in advance, please foward those to me or let me know where I may obtain them.





Sincerely,


(your name)
Reply:Coach Smith,





My name is ____ ______ I am currently a senior at _____ High School and I am interested in pursuing your schools baseball program. I had a few questions reguarding the programs paperwork process.





Thanks,


Your Name
Reply:attach a few pictures of yourself in the e-mail,





preferably a picture of you on the baseball field,





and a picture of you off the field so he can better know you.
Reply:id start out with Dear Mr. (Coach name)





your name would be helpful. what you play. and tell them how devoted you are and that it would be an honor to play for that program.





thats the kinda BS that got me into college